Thursday, 16 March 2017

The Magic Box

The magic box

Today in room 7 Miss Ashley showed us a box. It wasn’t just an ordinary box it was a magic box. So Miss Ashley introduced what we had to do.

What we had to do was that we first get blindfolded and then Miss Ashley puts something inside the magic box and we had to find out what it was.We had to use our other senses to figure out what was the subject.

All the students took turns.It felt forever as I waited.It was finally my turn.I felt so nervous when miss ashley put the blindfold on me. I was starting to question myself is it going to be gross? Or was it gonna be hard or soft? Finally Miss Ashley said “ go” so I started to feel the subject. I was surprised because it wasn’t an object it was a food. Finally it was a food because my stomach was hungry and also I didn't had any breakfast.

It felt so hard and rough. It was very breakable and it tasted like doritos.When I bit into it my mouth made a “ crunch “ noise.I took another bite and another and another until my tongue felt like it was on fire! It was really spicy! Then I told Miss ashley, I gave up then she took of the blindfold  and told me that it was corn chips. Then I replied “ That was what I was thinking in brain”.

I really enjoyed this activity. It was really funny and it helped us by our learning by practising our describing words.

"Here is the recount I wrote on Monday without any editing".

Sentence starters to use:
  • As I stood waiting, my heart was
  • I put my hand nervously into the box, and I felt
  • When Miss Ashley put the blindfold on, it felt like
  • The class giggled as

Did I remember to include….
yes
Title
yes
Introduction
yes
Who, what, when, where, why, who, how
yes
3 paragraphs - burger model
yes
Conclusion - my own thinking/reflection
yes
Specific adjectives
yes
Simile/Metaphor
yes
Different punctuation

Short sentence for effect
yes
Correct spelling throughout the story

A sentence you have added in editing

A sentence you have moved in editing

Sentence starters given


The magic box

Today in room 7 Miss Ashley presented us a box. It wasnt just an ordinary box it was a magic box. So Miss Ashley introduced to us what we had to do.


What we had to do was that we first get blindfolded and then Miss Ashley puts something inside the magic box and we had to find out what it was.We had to use our other senses to figure out what was the subject.We did this because it helped us to write our describing recount.

All the students took turns.It felt forever as I waited.It was finally my turn.I felt so nervous when Miss Ashley put the blindfold on me. I was starting to question myself is it going to be gross? Or was it gonna be hard or soft? Finally Miss Ashley said goso I started to feel the subject. I was surprised because it wasn’t an object it was a food. Finally it was a food because my stomach was hungry and also I didn't had any breakfast.

It felt so hard and rough. It was very breakable and it tasted like doritos.When I chewed into it made a “ crunch “ noise.I took another bite "crunch,crunch,crunch"! until my tongue felt like it was on fire! It was really spicy! Then I told Miss ashley, I gave up then she took of the blindfold  and told me that it was corn chips. Then I replied “ That was what I was thinking in brain”.

I really enjoyed this activity. It was really funny and it helped us by our learning by practising our describing words.

"Here is my edited story"


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